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I'm starting to like the darkness now.
I can't see myself.
I can't see what I know is going on.

Maybe I hear every little creak,
but not if I scream.
Not if I drown out everything.

So this is how it has to be
to stop feeling this way,
to stop feeling the intensity inside.
So this is how it has to be
if I'm going to stay alive.

I'm starting to like the smallness of my car
when no one is there
and I am left entirely alone.

I'm used to these tears
that I haven't seen in years,
that stream down my face almost nightly now.

So this is how it has to be
to stop feeling this way,
to control the intensity inside.
So this is how it has to be
if I'm going to stay alive.

Insatiable I guess,
but in such a mess...
The short drive back to my home.
Temporarily alone
with the tears by my side
till I'm finally inside.
My room is dark it seems
where I let out all my screams.
I guess this is how it has to be.
©2005-2009 ~FallingForYou
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Author's Comments

Sometimes my thought process actually comes out sounding quite interesting. So, as opposed to the non-description I gave before...here's the thought behind this poem that people've been tryin to figure out.

It's just about wanting some alone time. Wanting to separate yourself from everything that goes on day to day that just adds to the intensity of every emotion you're feeling. The first stanza, about darkness...refers to me stepping into my pitch black bedroom and found comfort in not being able to look at myself in the mirror and have another go around at how much I hate how I look. Or to see in my room all the reminders of life. The stanza about the smallness of my car... okay well I have a tiny car...seriously, but I don't get privacy almost anywhere else. I don't get it at home, I don't get it being outside walking around.... I get privacy when I get behind the wheel and drive... in my own lil bubble (and yes, that's pretty much what my car looks like). My favorite stanza, as well as some others...focused on the tears. I tried so hard for most of my teen years to not cry over things...it just didn't help. And now, I find that crying is about the only thing I can do...it's just the last release of emotion that I have at the end of the day sometimes.

So there... a slightly more explained look at this piece....thanks everyone who read it and liked it and commented :D much appreciated.

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:iconfallingforyou:
Well I'm very glad you saw it as such...cause it was pretty much a flow of thought process... almost exactly. :) Thanks for the comment, glad you liked :D

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:iconfallingforyou:
First off, thank you for such a great comment! :)
To better explain the italicized line:
As I wrote the poem, the first verse started off as just a random thought...and as I kept writing it...I was almost getting more and more angry/upset. However, the very last stanza (being the end of what was going on in my head) I calmed down... and so I took the first line from the two, I guess "choruses" if you will... and basically meant it as a calm resolve. Almost as if it was just kinda muttered under my breath as a last final statement.

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I really, really love this. :)



"So this is how it has to be
to stop feeling this way,
to stop feeling the intensity inside.
So this is how it has to be
if I'm going to stay alive."


That verse really flows well in constant rhythm. It gives off a feeling of urgency. The repetition of this verse later in the poem really adds to the effect.



"I'm used to these tears
that I haven't seen in years,
that stream down my face almost nightly now."


Those lines, I can identify so well with.



This is a wonderful piece of writing overall. The little splashes of rhyme here and there give it just the perfect touch.
:iconfallingforyou:
Thank you so much for such a nice comment! I'm glad that my way of rhyming works well in this and doesn't make the flow off or make anything not tie together. I don't like rhyming too much, but I find that sometimes it helps...so I use it sparingly if possible :D
And yeah, I found that the lines about the tears is one that I've thought of many times before and heard people say...so I figured it would be a stanza that would be identifiable with.
Thanks again!! :D

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you didn't get it?...
Ah, I was just... I dunno...upset about alot of things... and so ... the only way I could stop everything that was making me upset or whatever is to just be in my own space... shut off from everything. yup...that may just make it more complicated...but I guess that's the best I can describe...on DA ;)

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Wonderful job! You're really good at puting emotion into your poem, and that makes it all the more wonderful! ^.^ Kudos for you!

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just the things you love the most, the things you need

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